Thanks for the feedback, guys. To address some of your comments....
It is peculiar that you didnt rant or rage out after your humiliating defeat at the hands of Garth Black.
Yeah, I perhaps could have gone into more detail about the loss to Garth. I did not for two reasons. Theron's been coined as our Cena by a number of people. Whining about a loss isn't really the best route for this type of face. When having had Theron rant about losses in the past I was advised of this, that maybe there's better ways to address it. Secondly, his mind was on Comic Con so even though he was attending to get fan perspectives on himself, he still was highly anticipating having fun with his friends at the con. When disregarding the con, I would need to find some kind of medium between shrugging off a loss (which I was not trying to portray) and whining about it.
Both Abel Hunnicutt and Logan McCallistar Cosplays justified their points why they will win. Theron himself had justified why he will. The part which I enjoyed the most is Logans accent. It was fun to read when someone else uses it!
Thanks! I thought it would be a fun touch to have the Logan Cosplayer acting in-character when he spoke, so glad someone agreed. The Abel Cosplayer was a little more difficult to write since he was not meant to be speaking in-character and just the typical rude fan who always favors heels.
Now its time to discuss about the negative(s). It probably is two things that bothered me. Therons girlfriend Kirlah seemed to be grumpier than usual which was uncharacteristic. She has her reasons to be grumpy as no one is caring much about her magic thingy but it still felt tad odd.
Kirilah would Holy Smite you for calling her meeting a "thingy". I see what you did there.
More on her attitude in a moment....
And the opening scene itself looked longer than it used to. It makes a bit of boring start to a fun RP.
Is there something you would have done differently when writing it? I wanted to continue to build toward the World Magic Conference each round for a bit, until the event itself. It's something I write about once each year. It played a role in my first Kingdom Come cycle two years back (wish I had saved it for KC itself), and Kirilah's graduation last year also took place during World Magic. The opening in the RP was intended to build toward something that happens in a bigger RP and in shorter form may have come off irrelevant.
I thoroughly enjoyed your RP from start to finish. I loved the beginning with everyone poking fun at Kirlah and what she's got going on. To piggyback on something Vee said in that her grumpiness seemed out of character I would be annoyed and grumpy to if people were making fun of something I thought was important.
You're absolutely right, from the in-character standpoint. I also wanted to have her show some more frustration this round to make things a little more realistic. There is no such thing as a perfect girlfriend, let alone a perfect relationship. Couples argue. So, Kirilah coming off grouchier than usual was to show that even the video game world's "perfect couple" archetype (Heroic male swordsman and Attractive religious female) still have disagreements. World Magic means a lot more to Kirilah than it does to Theron, and as I had said earlier it's setting up something I wanted to write about later.
Now on to the Con. This was my favorite part. While I was a bit confused as to why people would be Cosplaying Logan & Abel at a ComiCon type deal you made it work. I particularly like how you gave the 2 Cosplayers a bit of the character of the men they were dressed up as.
People cosplay all sorts of silly things. Pro wrestlers may be less known than the anime characters and video game heroes, but people come to real con's dressed up like wrestlers. It just isn't as common. The cosplayers were fun to write and I already had the idea going into the round. It getting booked as a triple threat just happened to make it fit all the better!
All in all another one hit out of the park. Between you & Funkay it's an even match.
Glad you both liked it. FunKay's was indeed good as well. Looking forward to the match and what the PPV round holds for Theron. I have a couple of ideas ready depending on what the next match is and (like Kirilah's graduation last year lol) it determines when the legitimate day of the World Magic Conference is. It's coming soon that's all I can say for now. I save that RP for a big one each year.
