Deexter Jorgan
Has a Dark Passenger on board...
We all know that penut, you made sure that when i started that i got all the help you could give me to make maxx into something special, so dont worry mate.
RP Feedback Thread
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We all know that penut, you made sure that when i started that i got all the help you could give me to make maxx into something special, so dont worry mate.
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Melon Farmer
Guest
Right...I took approximatly 30 minutes and we spoke on MSN...and I gave u the help and advice for your character. You made Maxx great...even if u relly had no matches with him...I felt like Maxxx is more interesting and I understand him better. And I am very glad that you took my advice and gave Maxx a manager (you) lol...very happy with that.
Again...Wanna apologize to everyone for the lack of communiaction
Again...Wanna apologize to everyone for the lack of communiaction
Due to this being written on the internet it may come across as bashing. However, I feel that I am giving my honest assesments of the following rps. Please do not take the following as bashing I am only trying to give constructive criticism.
Hey Michigan and DC I liked your rps. However Michigan, in your rp Everest comes off very cocky and honestly I can say the same thing to DC. the only real problem I had is that you didn't sound like faces. I'm sorry DC but I cant remember any face that swore that much. I mean I can understand anger but I would suggest that you watch a few John Cena promos or if you can find one a face Chris Jericho promo where he gets mad. they do a great job of showing intensity and anger without all the swearing. That, however, is merely a suggestion you can use it or not.
Hey Michigan and DC I liked your rps. However Michigan, in your rp Everest comes off very cocky and honestly I can say the same thing to DC. the only real problem I had is that you didn't sound like faces. I'm sorry DC but I cant remember any face that swore that much. I mean I can understand anger but I would suggest that you watch a few John Cena promos or if you can find one a face Chris Jericho promo where he gets mad. they do a great job of showing intensity and anger without all the swearing. That, however, is merely a suggestion you can use it or not.
I don't remember any face that swore that much either... if I was a face, I may want to think about changing that, lol. I'm taking a new route. Thanks for the feedback and tips though, but, I know exactly what I want to say and when I want to say it. Thats why I wrote it.
Alignment: Tweener
Alignment: Tweener
ok I was under the impression that you were a face, but as a tweener the promo was just fine. At the time I was looking at it I thought...man he seems more tweener then face...i hope he knows that. As it turns out thats exactly what u were thinking. so its all good then dont change anything
TheOneBigWill
[This Space for Rent]
Hey King, maybe D.C. is taking a Steve Austin approach to things? Austin swore all the time. So does Scott Steiner, & they're both faces??
TheOneBigWill
[This Space for Rent]
To be honest, anyone who curses shouldn't be looked upon as a "face" to begin with, including Steve Austin.. just because the old addage of a "face" is someone the "kids" can look up to.
However, the beauty of our E-Fed, is any wrestler, face, tweener, or heel.. can potray any type of persona they'd wish. A face can curse all he ways, & still attract tons of fans, from the intensity in the language. A heel can get boo'ed like crazy, just because he tries to play fairly, then complains about being cheated.. even if he truly was. lol
All in all, in today's wrestling world.. I think that of "face, tweener, heel" status has been thrown out the window. Anyone can be anything, as long as it sells to what the public likes, doesn't like, or puts up with.
King,
Thanks for the feedback.
I had to portray Everest as a little cockier than normal too kind of hide the fact that he's gotten his head handed to him the last time he seen DP and the Reaper so he would probably be a little more cautious.
So basically I'm trying to hid the little insecurities and worries he might have by making him sound almost to confident.
Again thanks for the thoughts.
Everest
Thanks for the feedback.
I had to portray Everest as a little cockier than normal too kind of hide the fact that he's gotten his head handed to him the last time he seen DP and the Reaper so he would probably be a little more cautious.
So basically I'm trying to hid the little insecurities and worries he might have by making him sound almost to confident.
Again thanks for the thoughts.
Everest
Steamboat Ricky
WZCW's Living Legend
Hey Ben Legend...
I liked your promo. You did an amazing job of not only promoting yourself, but you also put me over. Way to go bud.
I liked your promo. You did an amazing job of not only promoting yourself, but you also put me over. Way to go bud.
Bentallica
Work in progress
Thanks man. I thought yours was good, too. You really know how to promote the hardcore style of your character. Heres to a good match on Meltdown.
Steamboat Ricky
WZCW's Living Legend
You gotta be in it first, dawg.
Hey Everest that was a very well writen RP. Nothing to flashy, but still very creative RP. I liked the part with the kids argueing over who's better....ahhh that takes me back to my middle school days. Everyone can relate to being a kid with a sports hero and then meeting that person and that superstar being every bit as awesome as you had imagined. Like I said just awesome.
The Enforcer
The Heel John Cena!
Nice RP Everest.
So no comments on my RP? Was it complete and utter crap?
So no comments on my RP? Was it complete and utter crap?
Enforcer your Rp was good. I still stand in the belief that Everest's RP is in a class all it's own right now. I dunno though cuz he had more creative freedom in his RP. So I have to take that into account. You didn't have a choice where to do yours. So with that being said. I still give a slight edge to Everest. However, we still have yet to see D.C.'s RP so who knows what will happen. He may blow you both out of the water.
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Melon Farmer
Guest
lol...enforcer...did u block me on MSN??
lol...seriously people...he is your world champion and your co-mod for this fed....without him we wouldnt have all this...so seriously...fucken praise him.
I am in a very bad mood...bc one of our co-workers (meaning someone within the WZCW) has pissed the shit out of me!!!! And he is on my shit list!!!
lol...seriously people...he is your world champion and your co-mod for this fed....without him we wouldnt have all this...so seriously...fucken praise him.
I am in a very bad mood...bc one of our co-workers (meaning someone within the WZCW) has pissed the shit out of me!!!! And he is on my shit list!!!
TheOneBigWill
[This Space for Rent]
Joseph Rios: Very nice RP, hits home hard with some personal levels of intensness. Anytime you use videos, it makes it that much better.. in my personaly opinion, anyways. I PMed you on my other main thoughts with it.
Everest: BY far, amazing RP you just keep putting them out, over & over. I really don't know if I'd be in the same league as you, or D.C. when it came to Rping against either of you. I loved yours, but my only question is.. one of my very first RPs was similar.. did you think this idea up on your own, or did I somehow inspire you with the one I did?
For the record, I greatly think Everest's was far better than the one I did.. but I'm simply asking if you got the idea from me, or thought it up on your own.
D.C.: If I do say so myself, I must say I felt a lot of out of character heat coming off your RP. I loved it, personally. I think you drove the point home.. & your rip on both Everest & Joseph Rios makes you a great tweener for this match, one very much worthy of winning it all.
By all means, I hope I do all three of you justice, as I'm the one writing your match. Its definately shaping up to be unbelievably hard to decide a winner.
Everest: BY far, amazing RP you just keep putting them out, over & over. I really don't know if I'd be in the same league as you, or D.C. when it came to Rping against either of you. I loved yours, but my only question is.. one of my very first RPs was similar.. did you think this idea up on your own, or did I somehow inspire you with the one I did?
For the record, I greatly think Everest's was far better than the one I did.. but I'm simply asking if you got the idea from me, or thought it up on your own.
D.C.: If I do say so myself, I must say I felt a lot of out of character heat coming off your RP. I loved it, personally. I think you drove the point home.. & your rip on both Everest & Joseph Rios makes you a great tweener for this match, one very much worthy of winning it all.
By all means, I hope I do all three of you justice, as I'm the one writing your match. Its definately shaping up to be unbelievably hard to decide a winner.
Ok D.C. I have determined one thing from your promo.
Jeff Hardy should have you right his promos. Yes you heard me right. If he could cutpromos like you cut rps then we would be talking Jeff Hardy Vs. Orton at Armageddon instead of Y2J. Yes, your RP was that good. IMO unless Rios or Everest come back and somehow find a way to cut a better RP. I think you should be awarded the title shot by default.
Jeff Hardy should have you right his promos. Yes you heard me right. If he could cutpromos like you cut rps then we would be talking Jeff Hardy Vs. Orton at Armageddon instead of Y2J. Yes, your RP was that good. IMO unless Rios or Everest come back and somehow find a way to cut a better RP. I think you should be awarded the title shot by default.
The OneBigWill, actually there was a little of both, the idea had come to me earlier for another show but as I was writing it and I kept thinking I've seen this idea in one form or another before. So after a little research I finished it off and turned it in.
So in answer to your question I guess it would be a little of orginality and a little of your ideas as well if that makes any sense
Anyway thank you so much for the feedback I really appreciate it. Rios, Reaper and everyone thanks to all of you as well.
Everest
So in answer to your question I guess it would be a little of orginality and a little of your ideas as well if that makes any sense
Anyway thank you so much for the feedback I really appreciate it. Rios, Reaper and everyone thanks to all of you as well.
Everest
Steamboat Ricky
WZCW's Living Legend
I got a two-part RP done. I hope it doesn't seem too rushed. I appreciate you guys.
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MR.SCOTT
Guest
is it up now ricky???
Steamboat Ricky
WZCW's Living Legend
um, yeah. both posts.
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MR.SCOTT
Guest
Oh my god Ricky lmao, that was the best rp ive read in ages, the fact that you attacked wil smith, the ultimate baby face my god no wonder they all love you soo much lmao
Deexter Jorgan
Has a Dark Passenger on board...
My god ricky lmao, you did the impossible you got your character more over then he already was, i was laughing my heart out listening to you taking out will smith, not once, not twice but in three different eras rofl
