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It is... but he said we could have a little of it uilding up our character, you dont have to redo it, if you think its fine, stick with it, go with your gut
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S: Great, which match up would you most want to be in?
G: Well, I would think the ladder match, because it defines who the champion is, because HE grabbed the belt, not just pinned his opponent…
Timmy: yea, uh, I was just wondering, who did you defeat to get into this match?
G: That would be Steamboat Ricky, and he says I stole ideas from him, but the truth is, I respect the hell out of that guy
i have decided to redo it..and i thank Sincade and Will for giving me the chance to...u guys are the best!!!
I have already started on My RP...it takes place in the Ghetto's of Afghanistan...with HAsheem wakling around and reminising....u think that would help? I hope it does.
This is just one example of what I'm refering to. Its straight & too the point, which is fine.. don't misunderstand that, but if you wanted to add more to it, I can see it being a lot better.
For example, here, you're asked what match you would like to have the most. & your reply was straight to the point on why you feel "that" specific match would work, but it doesn't explain more on why GUS would feel more comfortable in that type of setting. I think you truly could've added that dispite your size, you feel comfortable with ladders & know how to use them. You could've added a sizable amount more to this reply. Understand?
This is one other thing. When you replied with the comment about Ricky saying you stole ideas from him, you blurred the lines between character & reality. Gus the character didn't "steal" anything, Gus the writer/posted "used" similar ideas. This (in my opinion) doesn't belong here, as it makes no sense for Gus - the wrestler/character.
Explaining how you beat Steamboat is acceptable, its what was asked.. but the background on stealing ideas is simply blurring reality from fiction. Understand?
ALSO - the ending parts with your conversation with Heidi, a lot of them were one sentence long. A lot of different points, including the interviewer, were one sentence long. I'm not saying it didn't work, cause it did.. & I'm not saying "be like me," cause you have great writing skills & a great imagination.. I'm just saying, IF it was me (which you aren't, & I'm not you, please don't take offense to me saying that) I'd change it & have the talking sections longer.
Not ALL of them, but the conversation at the end with Heidi could've been more worded. Instead of "yeah" type replies. Understand? I hope this has helped.. & I definately don't mean disrespect, as I think you're growing greatly as a RPer. I can't wait to work a feud with you!
Guys,
I am going to do my best to get my promo in by tomorrow. Life kind of threw me a curveball, and it's kind of overwhelming at the moment. I just wanted to let you guys know. Thanks in advance for understanding.
This is easily the most out of character post I've ever made.
Actually, in one of Steamboat's RPs, he put that I stole his ideas, so i was responding to that...
AM I allowed to edi my RP? becuase I had some new ideas for it... and it includes some YouTube Videos to kind of give people a visual idea of the matches, and i'm gonna make it based more on the ladder match, since thats what got voted in...
Hey Will, I am not Ricky and I don't speak for Ricky just my own opinion. I didn't think he was speaking to Mr. Sam the poster when he was doing his RP. I think that was just him calling Sammy Orwell: Mr. Sam because it's his, I guess, nature would be the best word for it I think. Like if he were talking to me he would call me Mr. Reaper or call you Mr. Will. Like I said just my opinion.