RP Feedback Thread

[Deexter Jorgan]

Thanks, man. I do think my RPs have been improving since I came back from that nine show "sabbatical" I took. The Legends line had to go eventually, and seeing how this is a big title match, I thought to quit it with this RP. I did read DJ's, and it was very good. If Ricky puts up a great RP (which I know he can), we may just have ourselves a match here.

One thing I didn't like about DJ's RP is how it failed to mention my character. If he had done that, he might've had this match won for sure. Mind you, it's still a great read, but bashing me was what would've put this one over the top.

Personally, I think this match would be a good cut off point for me and Ricky's feud if he loses the belt, but a Maxx-Legend rivalry with these great RPs would make for some quality matches.

i can understand where your coming from, the reason why i didnt say anything about you was the fact that i made the comment of wrestlers who couldnt even lace my boots, that was in regards to you, coz weve had no history, my beef is with ricky so i made the point to overlook you as a challenger, im not saying that you arent a threat, its just something i wanted maxx to do

 

[Bentallica]

i can understand where your coming from, the reason why i didnt say anything about you was the fact that i made the comment of wrestlers who couldnt even lace my boots, that was in regards to you, coz weve had no history, my beef is with ricky so i made the point to overlook you as a challenger, im not saying that you arent a threat, its just something i wanted maxx to do

Gotcha. It's your RP, you do what you want with it. And will see who couldn't lace who's boots at the PPV

 

[TheOneBigWill]

My RP is up. I personally think it's the best RP I've ever written, but what do you guys think?

I think you're right. Ben, I loved your RP. It was in-depth & covered the entire situation at hand. You had a great, heated discussion about Maxx & how he was brought into the situation. And you had a great show of respect for Steamboat Ricky. All in all, your RP was extremely solid & covered all your bases.

David: I liked Maxx's RP, because it touched base on how dark Maxx & your new, apparently group can be. The only issue I had, is you singled out Steamboat Ricky & there wasn't any discussion of Ben Legend in there at all. I love the role you're taking, in going after a one-on-one feud with Ricky & I think both of you could quite possibly be nice together..

However, I do have to admit, Ben covered everything that was required, by talking about everyone involved. Whereas Maxx covered base on the two people that were eliminated (by him?) on the way to a showdown with Ricky, in a result, almost not even mentioning Ben as being involved.. as if you're under-looking him.

I know you didn't do it personally.. I'm sure I did one in the same with my own RP for the Iraq show, by not focusing as much on Thorpe as I did on Gus. But I'm just pointing out for the record, try as much as you can to focus on everything involved, don't just center everything on one person.. unless thats the entire feud you want. (which could leave Ben wide open for the win)

 

[Steamboat Ricky]

My RP is up. I personally think it's the best RP I've ever written, but what do you guys think?

I would have to agree. Squeaks by the one from our first match.

 

[Deexter Jorgan]

I think you're right. Ben, I loved your RP. It was in-depth & covered the entire situation at hand. You had a great, heated discussion about Maxx & how he was brought into the situation. And you had a great show of respect for Steamboat Ricky. All in all, your RP was extremely solid & covered all your bases.

David: I liked Maxx's RP, because it touched base on how dark Maxx & your new, apparently group can be. The only issue I had, is you singled out Steamboat Ricky & there wasn't any discussion of Ben Legend in there at all. I love the role you're taking, in going after a one-on-one feud with Ricky & I think both of you could quite possibly be nice together..

However, I do have to admit, Ben covered everything that was required, by talking about everyone involved. Whereas Maxx covered base on the two people that were eliminated (by him?) on the way to a showdown with Ricky, in a result, almost not even mentioning Ben as being involved.. as if you're under-looking him.

I know you didn't do it personally.. I'm sure I did one in the same with my own RP for the Iraq show, by not focusing as much on Thorpe as I did on Gus. But I'm just pointing out for the record, try as much as you can to focus on everything involved, don't just center everything on one person.. unless thats the entire feud you want. (which could leave Ben wide open for the win)

As i said before will i did it on purpose to make ben seem more like an underdog, and focusing maxx on his primilary target, but i do understand where your coming from in regards to this and ill make sure to at least take some time to consider my other oponents as i feel this could be something special

 

[Bentallica]

I think you're right. Ben, I loved your RP. It was in-depth & covered the entire situation at hand. You had a great, heated discussion about Maxx & how he was brought into the situation. And you had a great show of respect for Steamboat Ricky. All in all, your RP was extremely solid & covered all your bases.

David: I liked Maxx's RP, because it touched base on how dark Maxx & your new, apparently group can be. The only issue I had, is you singled out Steamboat Ricky & there wasn't any discussion of Ben Legend in there at all. I love the role you're taking, in going after a one-on-one feud with Ricky & I think both of you could quite possibly be nice together..

However, I do have to admit, Ben covered everything that was required, by talking about everyone involved. Whereas Maxx covered base on the two people that were eliminated (by him?) on the way to a showdown with Ricky, in a result, almost not even mentioning Ben as being involved.. as if you're under-looking him.

I know you didn't do it personally.. I'm sure I did one in the same with my own RP for the Iraq show, by not focusing as much on Thorpe as I did on Gus. But I'm just pointing out for the record, try as much as you can to focus on everything involved, don't just center everything on one person.. unless thats the entire feud you want. (which could leave Ben wide open for the win)

I would have to agree. Squeaks by the one from our first match.

Thanks a lot for the feedback, guys. Ricky, I think this RP is far better than the one from our first match, but it's your opinion. Will, like I said before, if me or DJ wins the belt, I would love to feud with Maxx next. From a storyline perspective, DJ's RP shows lack of respect for my character. A feud with him could be involved about me teaching Maxx about respect, the hard way. But thats just my

EDIT: I just finished reading Ricky's RP, and it was exactly what I was hoping for. A great RP that will truly make this a very competitive match. Kudos to Ricky.

 

[Iscariot]

Just read D.C's roleplay for the PPV, very aggressive towards Manzo there lol, but was really good, really well written. The only issue I had with it, and many other people's roleplays, is the amount of swearing that's in it. Everyone seems to feel that their character needs to hurl and curse and tbh it gets boring on me after a while, but maybe that's just me.

But yes, a fantastic roleplay from D.C

 

[Deexter Jorgan]

Thanks a lot for the feedback, guys. Ricky, I think this RP is far better than the one from our first match, but it's your opinion. Will, like I said before, if me or DJ wins the belt, I would love to feud with Maxx next. From a storyline perspective, DJ's RP shows lack of respect for my character. A feud with him could be involved about me teaching Maxx about respect, the hard way. But thats just my

EDIT: I just finished reading Ricky's RP, and it was exactly what I was hoping for. A great RP that will truly make this a very competitive. Kudos to Ricky.

thats what i was hoping for, i wanted to make sure that thats exactly what happend legend talking about maxx's lack of respect for him, and it spurns off into other avenues other storylines/

Ricky all i can say is wow, your rp showed to me that your not just a class clown that you can be serious, i feel that my rp braught that out in you and im glad i want to see rickys no nonsense sid see what he can really do, love it and cant wait to match up with both of you guys

 

[Melon Farmer]

Ricky: Your RP was something, unexpected. You broke out of your pirate shell and then came back in it, which was perfect. You reminded me a lot like Festus, lol. The one problem I had was that I thought you did so much to show the mods that you did more than your opponents but whatever.

DC: Your RP was fanatastic!! You really took it to the edge!! I really hope we see a Manzo/DC fued...ucch how I would love that!! I laughed when I read my part. And my character isn't Hassan, it's Hasheem.

 

[TheRealDC]

Just for reference, the new approach to my character is that "foul mouth punk that pisses you off." The swearing, the crotch grabbing, the hand gestures, everything, lol, everything is there for that sole purpose. If you are irritated by the amount of swearing, that means I'm doing my job right, lol. But yeah, just tossing that out there.

 

[Melon Farmer]

Just for reference, the new approach to my character is that "foul mouth punk that pisses you off." The swearing, the crotch grabbing, the hand gestures, everything, lol, everything is there for that sole purpose. If you are irritated by the amount of swearing, that means I'm doing my job right, lol. But yeah, just tossing that out there.

The same goes for Hasheem. Hasheem also swears a lot and if that pisses you off or anything else I or he does then it is just what we want!!

 

[TheRealDC]

Well, I don't HAVE to swear... I can do an RP without swearing, its not a problem... I understand what he meant, I'm not trying to "rebel" or anything like that. In character, I don't give a shit. Out of character though, if people want me to tame it down a bit... I will... but, if the swearing is tamed down... other bars will be raised.

 

[Steamboat Ricky]

Your RP was something, unexpected. You broke out of your pirate shell and then came back in it, which was perfect.

Thanks?

The one problem I had was that I thought you did so much to show the mods that you did more than your opponents but whatever.

Frankly Coco, I'm not going to get into this with you.

Also, I saw that you editted your RP, that's not really allowed and should be dealt with, with the mods.

I read the rules, and nothing is written about that.

 

[Melon Farmer]

I liked your RP, no question about that, but whatever.

 

[Steamboat Ricky]

Did you alter any words in your RP?

ALLLLLL of them.


This really isn't your territory, Coco. Leave it to the mods.

 

[Melon Farmer]

I know. I'm not getting involved, but I can't ask you a question? I don't mean to have any heat between us, and I don't mean to be a jack ass, but all I asked you was if yuo altered any words.

Whatever, it isn't my place to say anything, I won't say anything anymore. I'm sorry.

 

[TheOneBigWill]

The one problem I had was that I thought you did so much to show the mods that you did more than your opponents but whatever.

Coco, I'm gonna say this one time & one time only. You seem to be holding a personal grudge against the man who you asked for his honest opinion on your RP, & you got it.

I don't know what you mean by claiming he's trying to "show the mods" that he put more into his RP then the other two, but the fact is, it was his RP. So maybe the next time you RP against someone & they put one in first & you put one in second, I'll remember this & think you're just making yours longer, to "impress the mods."

Also, David edited his RP as well, & as I recall.. he did it after asking. Ricky asked me the same thing, & I told him it was fine. Its because he mixed up the two announcers. I didn't address it publicly, because its something that noone needs to know.

So again.. you're jumping on Ricky for something David did as well. The only difference, you jump before you realize whats fully there. Next time, think before you jump.

 

[Melon Farmer]

Umm Will,

David did nothing until I told him that you gave him permission.

2nd of all,

even David knows that this has nothing to do with what Ricky told me. I heard what Ricky had to say but I don't hold a grudge for something stupid like a comment he told me. I asked for it, and he told me. I didn't like it but I accepted it. This has nothign to do with that.

You go ahead and remember that, let this whole thing blow over because I am not making a big deal out of this. This thread is called the Feedback thread, and just like David made his comment to Joe about his RP on the Iraq show, and the same thing that Ricky said to me, I'm saying it to him. It has nothing to do with the fact that he had a few comments abuot my Iraq RP. I'm glad he didn't like it bc I would rather fix it then let it stay bad.

I really wish you would stop assuming things, especially when, at this time, you are not right. I simply said long, because that is what I felt. I felt that the RP has 2 seperate things, and it had nothign to do with one another. Shoot me because I had an opinion.

 

[TheOneBigWill]

Umm Will,

David did nothing until I told him that you gave him permission.

First & formost, you tried "playing mod" by assuming Ricky never asked permission, & you tried playing it off that you felt he should basically be disqualified from the match.

From where I sit, thats you trying to play favorites on behalf of David. I'm not arguing over it, its my opinion. I also DO NOT want you replying to this, or continuing this discussion regarding the matter.

The final say is this.. Ricky got MY permission, just like David came to me and got MY permission. Both men were okay'd to do what they did, by me. I don't need to explain myself to the entire board, when it was a simple matter of editing one name, or reformatting an entire entry, & resizing pictures. Thats it..

You go ahead and remember that, let this whole thing blow over because I am not making a big deal out of this. This thread is called the Feedback thread, and just like David made his comment to Joe about his RP on the Iraq show, and the same thing that Ricky said to me, I'm saying it to him. It has nothing to do with the fact that he had a few comments abuot my Iraq RP. I'm glad he didn't like it bc I would rather fix it then let it stay bad.

I really wish you would stop assuming things, especially when, at this time, you are not right. I simply said long, because that is what I felt. I felt that the RP has 2 seperate things, and it had nothign to do with one another. Shoot me because I had an opinion.

Leore, I don't care that you have an opinion, I'm happy that you voice your opinion, because believe it or not.. I value what you have to say, & I enjoy reading your feedback. But once again, I know what went down, & I know what you said to Ricky, & how you reacted to his judgment. Don't tell me any different, especially when I can prove you wrong.

I'm not arguing this matter with you either, & for whatever reason I don't want you thinking I am. Seriously, I love you being here, & I value your opinion. How many times have "I" been the one thing asking you to stay? How many times have "I" been the one person calming you down, or trying to do all I can to help you? So because of that.. why would you try to argue this with me?

Final statement.. your opinion is fine, just like mine is. We won't see eye to eye on this, because you won't come to believe what I do, just like I won't lean away from seeing what I've seen. You're a good person, & your opinion matters.. but as far as the judgmental calls on "playing mod" by claiming he should have something done.. when you don't know the whole situation.. ask before you speak, okay? Thank you.

 

[Melon Farmer]

I know you told me to not post anything but just hear me out, please.

Believe it or not, we are seeing eye to eye because me and Ricky had a good long conversation on MSN where I apologized and we hashed things out, and thankfully everything is fine between me and him, and hopefully there is no hostility between the 2 of us.

I apologized for accusing him of sucking up and I apologized for playing mod, and for that I also apologize to you, Will. So there you have it, you get the final word but I just wanted you to know I'm sorry. Ok?

 

[a0161613]

Woohoo

Peace at last!!!

I am off the the RP board to start my RP, i should be able to do this on my lunch break.

 

[Iscariot]

Harmony is a wonderful thing, let the love flow brothers

But honestly, only ONE person has commented on my RP - This is my first one back from being away fro a while, and I'd appriciate some feedback, as I don't know if it comes across as well as I'd hoped - how did y'all find it?

Iscy

 

[a0161613]

The RP is up guys; would love some feedback.

 

[TheOneBigWill]

Alex: (It is, Alex, right? A0) Your RP was definately different. Through my eyes I see both good & bad points. First, the negative side of things.

I think you need to seriously consider formatting everything, & adding color to those who talk. When you just type everything out, & don't really bold who's talking, or add color to speak.. it blurs everything into one big "black" text script. Also, the RP was kinda limited & small. Grand Mystique didn't really touch base on a lot of stuff, & I think detail & length are a plus, although thats not to say small RPs are a negative. Those are the only two issues I had with it.

Now, the positive side of things.

Every bit of your RP, I could see your character in it. Don't ask me how exactly, because you went from making me see Rey Mysterio in the W.C.W. question mark tights.. to seeing that character from the Spider-Man cartoons. Thats not a bad thing though, because I think thats the entire part of your character. Mysterious, Mystical. (sp?)

I loved the crystal ball bit, & the dice ending up in 1, 2, 3 as its kinda spookey, eerie in a ways. And if it was anyone else, I really don't think I could see it.. but with your character, I can. All in all, I think it was a good (not great) first RP.

I'm glad I took a chance on you, I fully think you're only going to get better with time.. & I see a lot of great potential for you!

 

[a0161613]

Will,

Cheers for that. It was a lot shorter than i had in my mind (and on paper, lol) and while I know now that i could extend it ( i had a look at another RP that i have got and realised i could have meshed the two) I was quite happy with how it all turned out.

I am blaming my eagerness to post it early for the lack of formatting. I did on my lunch break and realised that what i should have done now is type it, save it and then post it (making it all shiny )

Although the various bold/italic/underline typing was an acknowledgement that i need to make it different!

And yes, it is Alex...lol