Thriller Ant
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It is time for Thriller's glorious return to feedbacking (Is that a word?)!
William Teach: I liked it. It was funny, and you used Stacy well while also using the random nature of the show. The only thing was that your guy had moments of cockiness, which contradicted the face feel I got from the RP as a whole. I really think that is an easy fix though. Good job.
Mr. Baller: I didn't like the start. I can't put my finger on why, and I'm sorry for that, but the part where you recap All or Nothing just didn't feel right to me. The other problem is that you pushed Stacy. If you had permission, then ignore this, but I think that it is against the rules to attack an interviewer, so just be aware of this.
Matt Royale: I really liked it. The fact that you showed that you are just having back luck in general was a nice accent to the fact that you are still winless. You have come to accept that you can't beat Fox cleanly, and now you are ready to do whatever. If I was to offer any critiques, it would be a reminder to keep an eye on your grammar and commas, but I'm a journalism major so that stuff jumps out to me. Keep going like this and you won't be winless for much longer.
Karnage: I loved it. To be totally honest, I knew little to nothing about your character, but I feel like any questions I could have were answered. Excellent job.
Scott Hammond: It was pretty good. It was solid for a first "official" RP. My only complaints are, first, as a newcomer, I would want to hear a little about your background. How did you get here? Why should we care about you? The other is, once again as a newcomer, why would you call out other new guys? Why not call out Everest or Ricky or someone like that?
Trevor Steel: Good RP. The exchanges with Leon were funny, but at the same time you were about to use the location to get your point across. In addition, you did a good job covering your bases with the lottery, too.
Big Dave: This was excellent. The explanation was both needed and very well done. The flashbacks were believable and brought me up to speed. I feel like, even though we've been feuding, that this is the first solo RP you've done in awhile, and I really like the Big Dave character. There is a lot of development here, and it was superb.
Zander Young: I didn't have any problem with the content here, but the formatting lost me. The color was good, as were the italics for the stage directions or whatever you want to call them, but the change of days caused me to get lost. Maybe do that in bold or all caps next time? The content was good, however. Good RP
Ashleigh Falkon: I really didn't like it. It was really well written and interesting, but I just feel like it didn't do anything for me or the character. Maybe it's just me, but I just didn't like it.
That's it for now, I might come back and do more later.
William Teach: I liked it. It was funny, and you used Stacy well while also using the random nature of the show. The only thing was that your guy had moments of cockiness, which contradicted the face feel I got from the RP as a whole. I really think that is an easy fix though. Good job.
Mr. Baller: I didn't like the start. I can't put my finger on why, and I'm sorry for that, but the part where you recap All or Nothing just didn't feel right to me. The other problem is that you pushed Stacy. If you had permission, then ignore this, but I think that it is against the rules to attack an interviewer, so just be aware of this.
Matt Royale: I really liked it. The fact that you showed that you are just having back luck in general was a nice accent to the fact that you are still winless. You have come to accept that you can't beat Fox cleanly, and now you are ready to do whatever. If I was to offer any critiques, it would be a reminder to keep an eye on your grammar and commas, but I'm a journalism major so that stuff jumps out to me. Keep going like this and you won't be winless for much longer.
Karnage: I loved it. To be totally honest, I knew little to nothing about your character, but I feel like any questions I could have were answered. Excellent job.
Scott Hammond: It was pretty good. It was solid for a first "official" RP. My only complaints are, first, as a newcomer, I would want to hear a little about your background. How did you get here? Why should we care about you? The other is, once again as a newcomer, why would you call out other new guys? Why not call out Everest or Ricky or someone like that?
Trevor Steel: Good RP. The exchanges with Leon were funny, but at the same time you were about to use the location to get your point across. In addition, you did a good job covering your bases with the lottery, too.
Big Dave: This was excellent. The explanation was both needed and very well done. The flashbacks were believable and brought me up to speed. I feel like, even though we've been feuding, that this is the first solo RP you've done in awhile, and I really like the Big Dave character. There is a lot of development here, and it was superb.
Zander Young: I didn't have any problem with the content here, but the formatting lost me. The color was good, as were the italics for the stage directions or whatever you want to call them, but the change of days caused me to get lost. Maybe do that in bold or all caps next time? The content was good, however. Good RP
Ashleigh Falkon: I really didn't like it. It was really well written and interesting, but I just feel like it didn't do anything for me or the character. Maybe it's just me, but I just didn't like it.
That's it for now, I might come back and do more later.