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Ok heres my feedback im gonna be brutal so if anyone has a huge problem with it pm me or messanger me the link is on my profile:
Izzy: I like the way you continued the storyline between Manzo and Sincade from all or nothing, it showed focus, depth and gave us a brilliant look at Manzo's past, truely deserving and now i can see why they put you in the main event, Im Sorry i ever doubted you bra...
Mystique:Great Rp, Showed us alot about your character, you used real life events and references to create a story, on the negatvie side it was abit too long, it got boring at times and I had to really focus to continue reading it, if i can give you any advice it would be to make your rp's short and sweet for now, and i use the words for now due to the fact that you are still green, but i see progression and as david stated earlier you are on the fast track to main eventing just keep up the good work.
Ricky: I loved the Rp, felt it showed another side to your character but what i didnt like is the fact that you focused on legend to much, Maxx was being downplayed alot in that rp, i dont know if that was on purpose or just something that you forgot to include i dont know, but i will steal a comment from Will from the all or nothing feedback when he said dont over look your challengers coz Maxx could slowly creep up on you.
Again not being negative or bashing you just something that i saw and thaught i point out, but again i love the direction of your character and the way you are changing from a comedy act.
Kenny: No Offence bro but not the best Rp you have ever done, it touched on points but i just felt like you wanted to insult people, and if you want to get back in the Tag title picture your gonna need more, also i felt that the RP was more of a tweener one i didnt feel like i wanted to cheer for you, i felt that you where complaining which works on some levels but not in this situation.
Joe: Short but sweet, it dealt with the whole issue between the DS and WVC IMO it is the best RP that you have ever done, and talking about how those titles are still vacant due to the way DS won them was priceless, good job and im glad your improving i see a bright future if you keep writing like that.
Legend Part 1: Ok again another solid rp from you legend i really enjoyed it, you showed character deapth and like ricky proved that your more then just a one dimensional character you showed layers!
Legend Part 2: I didnt like this RP and ill tell you why, it felt like you where a victim of name callign and that you had to bash back, I did like the Maxx reference due to the fact that you used his RP as a way to strike back at David and it worked ten fold, but other then that it seemed like desperation and again its just my opinion if you feel that im wrong or wanna question me about it please write it here or pm me and ill responed.
Hasheem: Ive said all i needed to say about this RP, it was long but a good read Good Job and im glad that you followed my advice, well as little as i gave you lol
Milenko: Ok kid your new but there are a few things i felt that your rp lacked, firstly it was character I wanted to understand abit more about you then being a clown who likes to beat people up, and I think i saw a reference in regards to alcohol, why and what drove you to this?
The formatting was abit off but that cant be helped, it just takes time to get your character together, but other then that i see a good showing and if you want to pm me i can talk to you about developing your character abit more, maybe slowly building his story up with each Rp thats if you want my help that is coz the mods are here too and also COCO the crisp.
Maxx/David: Your developing as an rper,It was a good read and i felt the anger, just make sure you dont make a habit of doing the anger rp's all the time as will said it gets old really quickly dude.
Allied Powers/David: ROFL... I loved the mocking of the WZCW roster i dont know why anyone hasnt even referenced this at all or even commented on the characters, it was blinding, it showed something original it felt like i was watching trips and shawn do it i loved the midgets especially the Dynasty...WORD!, the end was abit of a struggle solid Rp all around but again you used the tortoured Maxx, I am interested in where this is going but try not to use that angry character too much because i saw alot of guys jump on you for it, and it made them look stronger IMO.
Will: Great RP, solid as always you showed why your one of the best heels in the fed and can really see you going for Rios, I want to see how this Gus will feud pans out because this seems like something thats like a volcano its gonna explode sooner rather then later.
Gus: Great use of storyline, again great development from you, I was worried about all or nothing with the stinkfest of an RP that you put out i found it unbelievable, i couldnt cheer for your character and just felt that it was more stupid then anything else. but with this one WOW bro you nailed it on the head and hit the various storyline points including Heidi, Will and the rematch clause brilliant kid and i hope its enough to get you back the gold!
Izzy: I like the way you continued the storyline between Manzo and Sincade from all or nothing, it showed focus, depth and gave us a brilliant look at Manzo's past, truely deserving and now i can see why they put you in the main event, Im Sorry i ever doubted you bra...
Mystique:Great Rp, Showed us alot about your character, you used real life events and references to create a story, on the negatvie side it was abit too long, it got boring at times and I had to really focus to continue reading it, if i can give you any advice it would be to make your rp's short and sweet for now, and i use the words for now due to the fact that you are still green, but i see progression and as david stated earlier you are on the fast track to main eventing just keep up the good work.
Ricky: I loved the Rp, felt it showed another side to your character but what i didnt like is the fact that you focused on legend to much, Maxx was being downplayed alot in that rp, i dont know if that was on purpose or just something that you forgot to include i dont know, but i will steal a comment from Will from the all or nothing feedback when he said dont over look your challengers coz Maxx could slowly creep up on you.
Again not being negative or bashing you just something that i saw and thaught i point out, but again i love the direction of your character and the way you are changing from a comedy act.
Kenny: No Offence bro but not the best Rp you have ever done, it touched on points but i just felt like you wanted to insult people, and if you want to get back in the Tag title picture your gonna need more, also i felt that the RP was more of a tweener one i didnt feel like i wanted to cheer for you, i felt that you where complaining which works on some levels but not in this situation.
Joe: Short but sweet, it dealt with the whole issue between the DS and WVC IMO it is the best RP that you have ever done, and talking about how those titles are still vacant due to the way DS won them was priceless, good job and im glad your improving i see a bright future if you keep writing like that.
Legend Part 1: Ok again another solid rp from you legend i really enjoyed it, you showed character deapth and like ricky proved that your more then just a one dimensional character you showed layers!
Legend Part 2: I didnt like this RP and ill tell you why, it felt like you where a victim of name callign and that you had to bash back, I did like the Maxx reference due to the fact that you used his RP as a way to strike back at David and it worked ten fold, but other then that it seemed like desperation and again its just my opinion if you feel that im wrong or wanna question me about it please write it here or pm me and ill responed.
Hasheem: Ive said all i needed to say about this RP, it was long but a good read Good Job and im glad that you followed my advice, well as little as i gave you lol
Milenko: Ok kid your new but there are a few things i felt that your rp lacked, firstly it was character I wanted to understand abit more about you then being a clown who likes to beat people up, and I think i saw a reference in regards to alcohol, why and what drove you to this?
The formatting was abit off but that cant be helped, it just takes time to get your character together, but other then that i see a good showing and if you want to pm me i can talk to you about developing your character abit more, maybe slowly building his story up with each Rp thats if you want my help that is coz the mods are here too and also COCO the crisp.
Maxx/David: Your developing as an rper,It was a good read and i felt the anger, just make sure you dont make a habit of doing the anger rp's all the time as will said it gets old really quickly dude.
Allied Powers/David: ROFL... I loved the mocking of the WZCW roster i dont know why anyone hasnt even referenced this at all or even commented on the characters, it was blinding, it showed something original it felt like i was watching trips and shawn do it i loved the midgets especially the Dynasty...WORD!, the end was abit of a struggle solid Rp all around but again you used the tortoured Maxx, I am interested in where this is going but try not to use that angry character too much because i saw alot of guys jump on you for it, and it made them look stronger IMO.
Will: Great RP, solid as always you showed why your one of the best heels in the fed and can really see you going for Rios, I want to see how this Gus will feud pans out because this seems like something thats like a volcano its gonna explode sooner rather then later.
Gus: Great use of storyline, again great development from you, I was worried about all or nothing with the stinkfest of an RP that you put out i found it unbelievable, i couldnt cheer for your character and just felt that it was more stupid then anything else. but with this one WOW bro you nailed it on the head and hit the various storyline points including Heidi, Will and the rematch clause brilliant kid and i hope its enough to get you back the gold!
but the actions were a bit choppy. But for an interview, there really isn't much you can do, so it was understandable. So, for others, Everest was stationary and confined to a set area. Everyone else that isn't confined and is free to do whatever they want, you should use some more action. Since Everest is basically sitting there talking... he can get away with not doing much. 
