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The important takeaway - Callahan was in the MOTN.
Single handedly keeping this company alive. #ratings
Remember the guy who wrote it. #ratingswonMore importantly El Califa won MOTN.
I didn't really get any feel that Saxton and Saboteur had anything unique about them. They sounded like any two guys you might see on any given indy show. I didn't get the idea that one was crazy or why they were popular. They felt like two average guys who were a team. Maybe reading some of their promos would help but the match made them seem very basic.
E-Fed: not likely. MAYBE Kingdom Come but that's it.
Seeing a KC review would be awesome. What I will say is that I had written a small paragraph that was supposed to go above the banner for each match. They didnt get edited in before the show got posted. I blame myself. That would have helped you loads.Maybe something like a tale of the tape at the beginning of the match would be helpful.
Show a photo of the wrestlers with some basic info about them. Name, Height, weight, finisher and a fun fact (either logical (info about the character) or insane (info about their favourite breakfast cereal)).
You've had a go at us about that but I like it in the right circumstances.I like to think I railroad creative to an extent. Parts of my moveset are designed to link together, like the shin kick => complete shot and complete shot => Koji clutch.
I dont think there's LOADS to be taken away but I would be lying if I didnt ask KB to do this for similar reasons, namely in the spirit of improvement and an opinion from an unbiased judge..Again, I'm not disagreeing with you in the slightest. I find it really interesting that you're saying this, in fact. I think there are a LOT of things that Creative needs to take from this review and this is something in particular that should be focused on. This is purely on Creative, and maybe it's something they didn't think about that they definitely need to starting now.
Again, it's the disconnect between Creative writing a "wrestling match" and a match with the actual characters that are wrestling.
In the old days, they would bracket the named moves, I hated it. This is one thing I would like to see taken away.This brings up something else I wanted to mention: saying what a finisher is would help a lot. I had to keep going to the roster page and finding out what the move was. Something like "Cougar hits the Final Act! After that devastating C4 from the top, how can Constantine possibly kick out?" Or "Holmes hits the Imperial Impaler piledriver for the pin."
We have less of an excuse at PPV when we (generally) have less to write.Also, mix up the way you refer to people. Seeing the same names over and over and over again gets tiring. Let's take Drake Callahan for instance. Here are the following names from the PPV match that make him easy to identify and can be used to freshen things up:
Drake
Callahan
The man without a mask
The former world champion
The villain/heel/evil one
What sounds better? A mixture of those names or:
Drake
Drake
Drake
Drake
Drake
Also try to avoid using the word "he". It can get REALLY complicated really fast. For instance (made up example): "Callahan charges at him with a clothesline but misses. He comes back with a dropkick to put him down."
Who hit that dropkick? Try to use at least one name per sentence to keep it clear who is who or things can get really confusing in a hurry.
Yes, there is a balance that needs to be found.Somebody is going to take this far too seriously and write worse as a result of it. Variation is nice and all, but in the majority of cases you should be using to simplest moniker possible to convey meaning.
Also; telling people to avoid pronouns is just about the worst writing advice ever bestowed. A better solution would be to improve the grammar and/or writing so that pronouns are always used correctly.
I think you have to enjoy writing in a certain style to capture Sab/Sax. There are some who did it better than others but that's why I am glad we pick our matches. I think I wrote one Saxton match in my time. I'd rather write a technical match or brawl which is why I'd prefer to write the lower card matches. I only wrote two or three World title matches and I dont think any were for a PPV main event.For what it's worth, nobody has ever been able to capture the Saxton/Saboteur dynamic like Doc and I, but that's to be expected. A few people have come close (Yazloz and Kermit have come the closest, Showtime, and surprisingly enough, Dynamite put in decent efforts). I think if you read a few of our RPs you'd find that we have a certain charm.
Again, KC should be epic. I'm very much excited for these next two cycles.Lethal Lottery and Kingdom Come are always pretty good. You should check those out when they get posted, if you have the time.
I am kind of conflicted about your review on the Iron-Man Match. I think the time stamps were a bad idea; I will admit that, but I felt a little trapped whenever I took on a match with a time limit whenever we hardly ever do matches with time limits. Especially one that is 60 minutes. So I felt a need to try to explain time, but I wasn't about to write another 25+ pages(that was the amount of the actual match in MS word). I am curious as to how you would of graded it if there were no time stamps, except for maybe the last 5 minutes.
However, I received good reviews from the two participants, and to be honest that is enough for me.
On top of that, as hinted at several times in your review, our writing is more friendly to actual members of the fed than outside readers. I think that is fine.
Sure, the extra things like adding pre-match descriptions and what-not would be nice, but that raises the question if people actually reading and if it is worth going back and doing that extra stuff. I know that we want to create an awesome experience, but after 40+ pages of writing matches for a PPV, I don't really know if I want to go back and add in extra material that 80% of our actual roster will not even read, let alone outside readers.
Also, mini recaps of people's history would be the way to go. I think that Numbers actually did mini-recaps for everyone this round, but they didn't get added for some reason.
Then again, I used to criticise the match writing in the pre-Lee because they completely ignored the roster page. I think it's because we hold such a high standard and rightly so, the roster hold us to a high level.
Yeah, but if you want to grow your roster with new people, wouldn't it be helpful if they can know what's going on?
It reminds me of my Roulette match last year with Johnny Scumm against Overlast and... someone else. I wrote this really serious RP for Saboteur and then he came to the ring with a goofy army of penguins. I'm not sure if this event is as infamous for everyone else as it is for Kermit and myself as I gave him a good deal of negative feedback for that, and while all is forgiven, it's still the perfect example of a writer not using the personality of the character correctly.
I think the next task for WZCW is to step up their match writing game.
You'll never let me live that down! This will be a pivotal point in our feud for KC28.
This kind of makes me scratch my head because half of our staff has been tenured on creative for a good 1-2 years plus. I say scratch my head, because I believe that they do some pretty great work, with the occasional hiccup.
Lulz. I know you're kidding here, but I wanted to clarify that I'm not trying to dog on you here, the penguins are just a really great example of a creative member not writing a match based on the character's personality.
I'd argue that there are 2 or 3 creative members that do consistently great jobs, but the rest are just average, often at best. It's easy to overlook three unimpressive matches when there are two great matches on the card.
I think you should just go ahead and say who you think they are. I am sure that any creative member would want to know if they are considered the part that is dragging.
You only say that because you're the P.I.C. now.Screw being humble, I'm excellent at everything.
Барбоса;4350843 said:Taking in my poor reading rate, lack of real interest in fantasy writing and lack of time to do said reading and writing on top of a lack of natural creativity, why the hell did I agree to take this on in the first place?
Answers on a postcard.
Барбоса;4350867 said:Ah, how many love affairs have started with pity?
You wanted to know the match results before everyone else?