WZCW Discussion Thread

[Dagger Dias]

First time I'm off a card in.... Nearly 4 years. Feels weird.

Same, it's been nearly as long for me and it does feel weird.

 

[Hyorinmaru]

Black Sesame Ice Cream

Not as gross as it sounds. It's actually pretty good

 

[Prince Vee]

The card looks intense, though. Despite missing some big names, the card still looks stacked up.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Definitely not how I was expecting to start season 2. Time to trip The Power Trip.

 

[Lee]

Anyone fancy doing a KC show review?

If so I'll give you one free "check my RP please" between now and Apocalypse.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Anyone fancy doing a KC show review?

If so I'll give you one free "check my RP please" between now and Apocalypse.

I'll do one.

#boredoutofmymind

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Once I wrap Tomb Raider, give me a couple hours.

 

[Dagger Dias]

I'll do one.

#boredoutofmymind

You won the predictions contest for Kingdom Come so I'll get you some feedback. Haven't forgotten just had an overbooked couple of weeks.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Sweet, I like winning things.

 

[Da Prophet]

Jeff, the spoiler tags for pinfalls is a bad idea. It's a pain in the ass. When I was going back to get moments for the opening I had to deal with matches where people had 3 freaking spoiler tags and nothing was more annoying. Like one event had all the matches with the stupid things over and over again. It didn't help the match at all. Just pissed me off.

Thanks for the review, buddy. Means a lot.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Jeff, the spoiler tags for pinfalls is a bad idea. It's a pain in the ass. When I was going back to get moments for the opening I had to deal with matches where people had 3 freaking spoiler tags and nothing was more annoying. Like one event had all the matches with the stupid things over and over again. It didn't help the match at all. Just pissed me off.

Thanks for the review, buddy. Means a lot.

No, it leaves the reader with an unknown factor. I'm not saying have the match chalk full of spoiler tags, just one or two even for mid match pins could help as well. That's my opinion as a non creative member, non match writer. I like surprises and 1....2.....3-NO !! Is kind of a non surprise reading it. It's not even a huge deal, just a slight nit-pick from an old man.

 

[Dagger Dias]

Battle Royal : No offense to the match writer (I'm not sure who it is as I write this) but I disliked pretty much the entire match except the heel tactic ending by Xander. It must be difficult to try and envision what all the competitors are doing at once and try to cut off sections of the action to showcase a spot between two or more wrestlers. I didn't really like Vox's quick elimination to start the match. Then, as much as I disliked Vox's exit, Vee gets a worse treatment, lol. He loses a pushing contest with Xander for his second elimination of the match. Meh.

Xander is left with a nightmare situation as he's left with the remaining powerful women in the match. He gets throttled with three special moves and is out of the match...but not eliminated. (kind of obvious where this was going IMO, a returning win)

After Wren got eliminated, the importance of Kagura vs Batti should have been showcased more, Kagura was once in an intense feud with Ramparte and stole his voice for awhile. Batti should have gone into a rage with the fans behind her for Kagura's past harm on her boyfriend. This one on one should have lasted longer with close near eliminations until the Kagura won.

Xander reentered (as expected) and eliminated Kagura with an assist by Adonis on the outside with the distraction. New Champion!

I liked the ending but overall, I found the match lacked some meat and maybe the opportunity for some more clever spots here and there.

That match was mine. While it is not an excuse and I admit that it's not an excuse, the truth is that I had very limited time to write it in comparison to the other rounds I have been on Creative. Until the votes came in I had no idea what the order of elimination would be, unlike a 1 VS 1 match where I could have started in advance. Secondly, the weekend I would have spent writing it fell on the same weekend as a massive worship conference my church hosted and that event took priority. This was followed by the Royal Rumble, work the next day, and more church commitments. It's already been discussed in the back so thank you for the feedback. When disregarding the lack of time I had, I also asked the other guys for tips on match writing which we also had a discussion on. I am the first to admit that my matches have not been the best. I hope this clears it up to you and to anyone else who might not have enjoyed the match.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

Jeff Deliverer of Mail - Kingdom Come 8 RP

Loved the Star Wars theme you had going in this RP. Star Wars tributes combined with your usual silliness worked very well together. You had me laughing many times as I read it, especially at the "Tony Mancini and (Name I hate spelling)" line or the silly line about the bread that the NPC woman dropped that literally "bounced on the ground and was never mentioned in the RP again".

Not entirely sure what "EVERYONESAWSTARWARSEV
ERYONESAWSTARWARSEVERYONESAWS TARWARSEVERYONESAWSTARWARSEV" was supposed to be. I know it reads "Everyone Saw Star Wars" but I don't get why it's all one long word. Might be a joke I somehow missed.

Having Darth Keaton travel to a planet of Salvific supporters only for the NPC's to all end up getting hit by the Stormtoopers' lasers was an interesting way to go about addressing your opponents and keeping true to the Star Wars theme. Then how it turns out it was all a movie shown by Keaton to Constantine was a great way to transition from one piece to another. Your work flowed with Constantine. I did vote for you guys and enjoyed both RP's.

The main thing I would have changed was the conversation between Darth Keaton and Emperor Constantine about the laughter. It reminded me a bit about the infamous awkward laughter cut-scene from FFX. That wasn't the bad part about it though. There was a little too much dialogue in a row here without enough descriptions in between the lines in the string of spoken dialogue before the camera angle pans the dead crowd. Did both of them just stand there laughing not doing anything else? You could have had them both doing poses as they practiced their maniacal laughter.

All in all, this is the best RP you have ever written. Something as out there as this might not work in most rounds, you nailed it here though.

That EVERYONESAWSTARWARS repeated over and over again was supposed to be a line break in between scenes that ended up looking weird. I didn't bother fixing it so it was just a line. Glad you enjoyed the RP, I had fun writing it. Fun Fact: Dave came up with the idea of having Star Wars quotes in our RPs after the Sinchan discussion thread moment of never hearing about Star Wars. I wrote a few Star Wars parodies in Fan Fiction so I took it a step further and plunged it inside the Star Wars universe. I don't think Dave was expecting me to take it that far and recovered with his RP starting out shutting off a homemade movie by Keaton. I was fully prepared for Dave saying it was shit and doing something else, I was kind of hoping he would as I wasn't exactly crazy about the RP myself.

 

[Viola Moonlight]

Here is my short review:

Show sucked. Remove everyone from the team. Put me in all seven spots. I'm the best. Prophet sucks. At least I won, so KC was really good. Great job!

(When I get back on land, I will give big review, like I give people my big penis - expect disappointing review).

 

[ShinChan]

Man it sucks when something enters your eye.

Even more when you ain't able to remove it.

 

[Dmbfantomas]

I have a new goal: Be the first one to get an RP in every single time. I don't like my odds, but it's a fun thing to do. I blow unholy amounts of ass at it anyway, so I might as well go for something.

 

[Lee]

Advice. Take your time. Do chunks of an rp.

 

[ShinChan]

I must admit that I too had the same goal initially.

 

[Dmbfantomas]

Advice. Take your time. Do chunks of an rp.

I've never been able to do stuff like that. I either finish everything right away or I put it off til the last minute. I'm a deadline ****e, so implementing one on myself is good, I think? It's always better for me (writing anything) when everything flows and there's no stopping.

 

[Bernkastel]

I've never been able to do stuff like that. I either finish everything right away or I put it off til the last minute. I'm a deadline ****e, so implementing one on myself is good, I think? It's always better for me (writing anything) when everything flows and there's no stopping.

This is the same for me as well. The only time I write RP's in segments is if I stay up late and damn near fall asleep at the keyboard writing. I keep track of my notes and finish up the next day. I did this at Kingdom Come. I actually wrote the second half of the Kagura RP in the waiting room of a hospital while my mom was having surgery :/.

 

[Lee]

That said it's the best RP you've done. I'll make sure to give you feedback on how things are and what to do.

Leon interview is a good place to start.

 

[Jeff Deliverer of Mail]

I like Vox.

 

[Lee]

Me too. He reminds me a lot of TItus' earlier RPs.

 

[Lee]

Milenko you need to review Red Son.

 

[Hyorinmaru]

Milenko you need to review Red Son.

I'll have to buy it. That and Kingdom Come are on the top of my To Buy list.