FunKay the Inevitable
People Like Me, We Don't Play
Stan Rogers: (Quick Note, I did these in reverse order so this is the last one I gave feedback to) What is it with the use of cars here? So many RP's with cars. Ah, the old bait and switch, very nice. Great use here with the aspiring young superstar. This is sort of like Saboteur's RP, but a less mocking and more joking. It's a nice change of pace to see a nice guy. I like this concept of an older wrestler, schooling everyone else. Good shot of a contract here, and even the win.
J.T. Brooks: HOLY GENERIC CHARACTER BATMAN! As you know by now, rich heels are very common here in WZCW. Hell, I'm one of them. To be honest, I think this character is incredibly meh. It's nothing we haven't seen before. The writing though is good. It's something you can apply to a better worked out character. I think you'll be out of the running for a contract, but come back next time with a different character, and we can see you being in WZCW one day soon.
Creed: You've been through this a couple of times now. Got to say that I respect you sticking through despite now getting that contract the first two times. You've improved since those first two, and now, you're far more polished. Don't use "@". It's lazy. You show good progression and this is solid overall. I see it being third time lucky.
Jack Skinner: There's potential. A lot of it. There's a narcissist thing brewing here which could work really well if done right. This felt like a teaser for the character, and in that respect, I don't think we got to know your character well enough. I think that's going to prevent you winning, but I think you're getting a contract none-the-less. How you work with this gimmick will be very interesting.
Ricky Runn: MY EYES! Damn that yellow text is horrible. You say Ricky waaaaaay to much in that first paragraph. Miz it up a bit with Rick, Ricky, Runn and maybe a nickname. The formatting is also bad. The enter bar is your friend; use it more often when it comes to dialogue and disruption. There's some okay description, but that's about it. I can't see anything coming your way at the end of the match.
Ewan Kampa: ...Que? I feel as if I'm watching a commercial for Lassie. This was very, very odd. I mean, it's great establishing a character, but when you don't talk about your match, your opponents and very little about wrestling/WZCW, then your only really establishing one half of the character. Its fairly well written and formatted, but it just doesn't have the content. No contract for you good sir.
Jackson Williams: Showtime's right, this is Showtime without the talk show thing. But at the same time, it's a fairly basic gimmick, and you make it work pretty well. The biggest problem I have is that the security guard doesn't recognise you, but the interviewer does? Not sure I buy that. The interview was good though and your points came across well. Candidate for a contract for sure.
Johnny Scumm: You could well have called this "My Homage to Batman". That's not necessarily a bad thing though, that's just what it screamed to me. The writing's very good, and while your character is a little weak, you have time to build up on that. Everything's fairly solid and it looks pretty polished so I think you've got a good chance of earning a contract.
Saboteur: Now, I'm already well acquainted with your character following your RP for All Stars so I'll be giving you slightly different feedback. I liked the interaction between Alvin and Saboteur. Obviously your character isn't the most serious person in the world so adding a polar opposite helped showcase the brashness. Good to see you might keep him around. Some of the stuff about getting paid seemed like filler though. Outside of that, I enjoyed this one quite a bit. I'd say you're getting a contract.
J.T. Brooks: HOLY GENERIC CHARACTER BATMAN! As you know by now, rich heels are very common here in WZCW. Hell, I'm one of them. To be honest, I think this character is incredibly meh. It's nothing we haven't seen before. The writing though is good. It's something you can apply to a better worked out character. I think you'll be out of the running for a contract, but come back next time with a different character, and we can see you being in WZCW one day soon.
Creed: You've been through this a couple of times now. Got to say that I respect you sticking through despite now getting that contract the first two times. You've improved since those first two, and now, you're far more polished. Don't use "@". It's lazy. You show good progression and this is solid overall. I see it being third time lucky.
Jack Skinner: There's potential. A lot of it. There's a narcissist thing brewing here which could work really well if done right. This felt like a teaser for the character, and in that respect, I don't think we got to know your character well enough. I think that's going to prevent you winning, but I think you're getting a contract none-the-less. How you work with this gimmick will be very interesting.
Ricky Runn: MY EYES! Damn that yellow text is horrible. You say Ricky waaaaaay to much in that first paragraph. Miz it up a bit with Rick, Ricky, Runn and maybe a nickname. The formatting is also bad. The enter bar is your friend; use it more often when it comes to dialogue and disruption. There's some okay description, but that's about it. I can't see anything coming your way at the end of the match.
Ewan Kampa: ...Que? I feel as if I'm watching a commercial for Lassie. This was very, very odd. I mean, it's great establishing a character, but when you don't talk about your match, your opponents and very little about wrestling/WZCW, then your only really establishing one half of the character. Its fairly well written and formatted, but it just doesn't have the content. No contract for you good sir.
Jackson Williams: Showtime's right, this is Showtime without the talk show thing. But at the same time, it's a fairly basic gimmick, and you make it work pretty well. The biggest problem I have is that the security guard doesn't recognise you, but the interviewer does? Not sure I buy that. The interview was good though and your points came across well. Candidate for a contract for sure.
Johnny Scumm: You could well have called this "My Homage to Batman". That's not necessarily a bad thing though, that's just what it screamed to me. The writing's very good, and while your character is a little weak, you have time to build up on that. Everything's fairly solid and it looks pretty polished so I think you've got a good chance of earning a contract.
Saboteur: Now, I'm already well acquainted with your character following your RP for All Stars so I'll be giving you slightly different feedback. I liked the interaction between Alvin and Saboteur. Obviously your character isn't the most serious person in the world so adding a polar opposite helped showcase the brashness. Good to see you might keep him around. Some of the stuff about getting paid seemed like filler though. Outside of that, I enjoyed this one quite a bit. I'd say you're getting a contract.