Mr. Artistic guy
Better Off This Way
I don't know if this is timed well or poorly, but when could I expect to hear back about the progress of an application I had made? Wouldn't want to miss the boat.
WZCW Discussion Thread
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Viola Moonlight
I'm Literally Just Here for WZCW
Once Ascension is done and over, we'll get back to you. You'll most likely be put on the roleplay boards next round as well (which comes up in a day or two).
Here are my highly unofficial thoughts:
You haven't really given the two gimmick characteristics and main gimmick, having squashed it into the gimmick section. Same with the appearance. Not the way I'd have done it personally but it's probably fine.
Your weaknesses seem awfully... Weak. His eyesight is "unbalanced", the fuck does that mean? Does he have less peripheral vision? Is he half blind in one eye? Details, man! Also is having "not limitless" stamina really a weakness? Marathon runners have limited stamina. If you mean he's got below average stamina, say that.
Also, he's supposedly got an unholy grip in submissions but has exactly three (one of which is a corner choke) in his arsenal. Something needs rethinking. For a guy who's focused on exactly one thing he doesn't exactly focus on anything with his moveset. His finisher is an arm submission, but none of his other moves affect the arm. You could also drop a couple of moves like the tilt a whirl, the tiger bomb, arguably the t-bone and definitely the northern lights. The former two are more complex than any dumbass beast would do, and how many monster heels do exploder suplexes or a bridge (kinda important for a NL suplex)?
I can't comment on the sample RP as I haven't read it. Nothing jumps out as being terrible so it's probably fine.
You should definitely give it a proof read though. Make sure everything that should be capitalised, is capitalised.
AS is probs tomorrow. You may sleep well this evening, good sir.
Damn.
Silly Willy Nilly Vanilly in the Milly
Blame it on the rain
MD was amazing. Kudos to creative.
Mr. Artistic guy
Better Off This Way
Alright, thanks a lot guys.
Yeah that 2 characteristic thing, I genuinely missed that part out when copying the template out. I'd have done it had I managed to just copy it into the posting part.
Other bits; I'm alright with the eyesight thing. 'Unbalanced' is a fractional difference which I think implies that his eye isn't so far as causing him real concern and he has one working eye, but so that action is favoured in the other eye, and the damaged eye may get caught unaware when coming in direct attack or when dealing with vision generated entirely by that eye.
As for the stamina thing, I wanted to try to word it carefully, once again to make it a minor thing and not sound as if the guy is going to be gassed 5 minutes in. It's just in contrast to the fantastical world of show writing where other guys' stamina can be seemingly limitless, I'm outwardly stating that if a match goes for a long time my guy is going to be likely more tired than his opponent. But he shouldn't have any issues in matches that are under, say, 15-20 minutes.
And for the wrestling section, there's some things I think can be useful there. The one thing I will defend is the difficulty and technical nature of some of the moves in contrast to his lack of intelligence. The idea is that although he doesn't possess a great deal of academic mental acuity, he has what you may call 'ring smarts'. I suppose a good real world example would be someone like AJ Styles, you hear him talk and he's not bright as a button, but he is technically gifted and generally flawless in the ring. I want to separate his scholarly mental inferiority from his physical nouse. Basically, he won't have difficulty executing a northern lights suplex just because he doesn't know the capitol of Belgium if you catch my drift. But you do raise a few good points that I could think about, and in fact with the 2 characteristic aspect, I may well redraft an app. tomorrow to iron out a few of the issues with seem to have arisen. I suppose these are the things that happen when you start writing at midnight.
But, yeah, thanks for the feedback.
Richard Blonoff
Make America Rassle Again
I know that most of you guys are probably busy with getting AS ready for tomorrow and discussing the boards for the next round but if a member of creative isn't too busy would I able to PM you over a concern that I have been having lately? Like I said I understand you guys are probably busy but whenever one of you has some free time I would greatly appreciate it
Silly Willy Nilly Vanilly in the Milly
Blame it on the rain
Feedback up for Awesome_Miz. My apologies for the delay, but last night, this happened...
Silly Willy Nilly Vanilly in the Milly
Blame it on the rain
lol had to find another image; it happens.
Awesome_Miz
Proud LSN mentee
Beastmode 24
BEAST MODE, MOTHERFUCKERS
Holy fuck tyndall. WTF
Silly Willy Nilly Vanilly in the Milly
Blame it on the rain
What an oxymoron, meeks.
And what are you WTF'ing about, sir?
And what are you WTF'ing about, sir?
Steamboat Ricky
WZCW's Living Legend
Finally, the evil empire is beginning to fall!!!!
Awesome_Miz
Proud LSN mentee
Don't WTF, Tyndall until you pay us our feedback back.
Richard Blonoff
Make America Rassle Again
I remember when I was going to review the shows, then I got afraid that creative would get mad at me if I gave negative reviews but I may get into it again
Oh, we will. We expect nothing but complete and total ass kissing from our underlings.
Richard Blonoff
Make America Rassle Again
Harth you are like the AJ of creative, no one likes you
Your metaphor is weak. Everyone loves AJ, for she is totes adorbs.
So you're calling me totes adorbs.
Thank you.
