[Request/Offer] Feedback Thread

[Dagger Dias]

I wouldn't mind taking you up on that offer Dagger if that's possible. I hope to churn out some feedback for others over the weekend, really been a pleasure to see the competition here!

Go for it man. I extend that offer each round to every member of the fed. Whether it's a veteran, a creative member, a regular, or even a rookie. Feedback for me with green rep for each feedback provider every round. Mine are about to be worth 19 points, so if that's further incentive. I do try to rep for RP's too.... I read all of them each round so unless it really sucked, the majority get rep for their effort.

 

[Spidey Revivey]

First go at this. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

 

[Remix]

'tis the season to be jolly. Therefore I'm going to do some feedback for three people each round until the new year. In the spirit of giving, I'm not going to be doing it for anyone who asks for themselves to get feedback. You suggest someone else who'll get it.

Basically, pick an RPer who isn't yourself and I'll give them feedback. Simples.

I know I'm giving some to Falk, since I want to publicly explain precisely why I hate his new gimmick in the least dramay way possible.

 

[GI Cake]

Give feedback to Spider Remix

 

[Dirk]

Dagger

 

[Dagger Dias]

I think Grizzly Bob would like some feedback too.

 

[Blade]

Same offer as last week; FB for FB. Maybe I'll get a few responses this time...

 

[Dan Severn's Moustache]

Yeah, I'll hit you up. I didn't see your response last time.

 

[Shotaro]

I tend to offer FB for FB but I never manage it. I will however tear your RP apart (metaphorically) if you give me some constructive feedback. I keep a list of who I owe and I'll get to you eventually.

 

[Барбоса]

I would not mind some FB this week, if only to see if I am still able to keep the story of Barbosa (somewhat) easily followed.

I will only offer rep in return though.

 

[Beastmode 24]

I'll do feedback for feedback/rep this round.

 

[Blade]

I'll be writing out my feedback either tonight or tomorrow, sorry for its lateness.

Actually, I don't have to be sorry, I'm on Creative. You will accept the lateness with humility and grace.

 

[Spidey Revivey]

Feedback for Feedback/Rep.

I'll give you the best pro/con synopsis green can buy.

 

[Blade]

Okay, I meant to get around to the feedback, but real life and Creative stuff got in the way. It will happen, I promise.

 

[Dagger Dias]

I will be offering green rep for feedback, as usual, if anyone is interested.

 

[Dan Severn's Moustache]

I really want some feedback for this round. I've put 110% into my RP, and I want to know if it was truly worth it. I promise that I'll award it with some feedback of my own (seeing as I am free for a while) and a minuscule point of rep.

 

[DarksideEric]

I really want some feedback for this round. I've put 110% into my RP, and I want to know if it was truly worth it. I promise that I'll award it with some feedback of my own (seeing as I am free for a while) and a minuscule point of rep.

I just read it, so I'll provide my

I think in some spots, in my opinion (and I can't recall reading something of yours before, so it may be your style in general), you become a bit long winded for me with some sections of description.

Such as:

equipped with flash-lights that incised the darkness and illuminated everything in their path.

I personally already paint the picture in my head of everything being illuminated when the darkness is split/cut, so I'm not sure if it needs that portion.

That was the main thing for me. I thoroughly enjoyed the read, but I felt at some points you didn't need some of the additional descriptive words or phrases because the prior line or portion of the RP had already painted the story well enough, for instance:

a button on his military radio

The scene has already well presented that this is a military group, so I feel "military radio" would have been more than fine as just "radio."

I quite liked the RP and character as a whole.

 

[Bernkastel]

I will be doing feedback for 5 people this round. It is first come first serve.

 

[GI Cake]

Dibs!

Also will be doing feedback for people this round free of charge. I promise 3 but I want to get 5 done at least.

 

[Барбоса]

Go for it.

 

[Dan Severn's Moustache]

I'm yours.

 

[Con T.]

I will be doing feedback for 5 people this round. It is first come first serve.

Please?

 

[Blade]

Yes please.

 

[DarksideEric]

Count me in.

Also I'll throw more out too if anyone wants me view.

 

[Blade]

I'm giving feedback and rep for feedback for up to the next 5 people who want it.