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Old 02-15-2018, 05:33 PM
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Prince Vee

English is not your first language. I get that. So I can look past how rough the writing was. But even so, it wasn't bad.

What I liked most about the RP: I really liked your descriptions. You painted a really good picture. Kudos for sticking with short, simple sentences. I find that to be the most effective way to narrate.

What I liked least about the RP: This RP felt incomplete. Like it was half-done. The RP went a long way to establish Vee's character outside of WZCW, but didn't do much to address his match, his opponents, or his wrestling career. The RP would have been much stronger if you had.

You did a good job exploring and expressing Vee's emotions away from the ring. Apply those same thoughts and feelings towards the fed itself. You're on the right track. With some tuning, I think you'll have a good showing at LL.
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Bernkastel you have successfully trolled me for a long time.. just wanna tell you that you are a VERY good troll. You made me wanna punch you in the face and strangle you
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